EPITAPH
A smouldering pile of fag ends
Are all that's left of Jane.
She gave up smoking twice a year
Then took it up again.
And emptying that last ashtray,
We struggle to ease our pain.
But we try to think of it like this;
Our loss is Heaven's gain.
(With thanks to Tess at Magpie Tales for the picture)
Well done! With such in mind, it's back to the drawing board for me. I know many who have quit, started, quit, started...
ReplyDeleteI don't smoke, but know hard it is to give up. Good luck, Yvonne!
DeleteGuess this comes under the heading of black humour?!
ReplyDeleteJust love it.
ReplyDeleteA friend, a heavy smoker, had a massive stroke a few months ago. She may not be 'Heaven's gain' for many years yet but she has found Hell whilst she is still here on earth. If your superb ditty stops one person smoking Frances it will have been even more of a masterpiece than it is superficially.
ReplyDeleteThanks, GB!
Delete"Heaven's gain" was clever, witty and mordant - mostly mordant.
ReplyDeleteYou're very kind, Berowne!
DeleteClever and dark and very good!
ReplyDeleteOh wow, this is really good.
ReplyDeleteYES! A lot of us are writing this same refrain- we miss our friends and our family who chose tobacco over us.
ReplyDeleteIt's such a waste, isn't it.
DeleteBrilliant! I'm tempted to send it to my daughter-in-law who gives up regularly, though I'm not sure it would do much for family relations.
ReplyDeleteI wouldn't, Gail!
DeleteI agree - brilliant clever write Frances.
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
Thanks, Anna (tho mine are never as good as yours!).
DeleteThis would sit very well in the Government's anti-smoking campaign. Brilliant writing.
ReplyDeleteOoh! Do you think they'd pay me?
DeleteGreat way to finish the year. I know two people I am hoping will give up again. Am tempted to send them this but don't want 2013 to start with a family fall out.
ReplyDeleteDon't do it, Lynne. We all need our families!
DeleteYes, we have lost many a beautiful soul to the cigs....lovely write Frances!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Carrie.
Deletenicely written Frances....thanks for sharing your words
ReplyDeleteThank you, Wayne!
DeleteYour language is much different here than an American poet's would be. And in this case, I believe it is also much better.
ReplyDeleteVery nice.
Some of my favourite authors are American!
DeleteVery good. I hope it encourages a few people to give up and breath easier.
ReplyDeleteNot much hope there, Patsy!
DeleteI haven't read the other comments yet, but this post is absolutely macabre! Good work!
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